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Existentialism on Prom Night by ~DementedDoll:iconDementedDoll:



Heart boxers and Incubus shirts...
the smell of him fills my head with fantastical thoughts of the night before.
When I was closely cuddled next to his still, sleeping form.
That feeling of wholeness that non could surpass.

I awoke that morning warm and full of happiness.
Just remembering the whispered phrases and meaningful carresses.
Giving me a distracted air;
daydreams invading my brain beacuse of its incapacity to function with my senses full of him.
I wish he was my teddy bear every night...

I wish it could stay this way forever...
But even if we do stay together,
that feeling will fade in time.
Even if we still love and care about eachother.
Just once could reality be broken?
Everything good disintegrates.
Even love.
©2005-2009 ~DementedDoll
:icondementeddoll:

Author's Comments

Yes, this title is taken from the name of a Straylight Run song. A very good song actually. And I wrote this poem the day after my boyfriends prom...it pretty much summed up how I was feeling.

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:iconairmega23:
Wow, Great job here. Your use of imagery is wondeful, as well your "told" emotions are wonderful. I really enjoyed the rather "small" images, which I am fairly sure are important to you. "Heart boxers and Incubus shirts" I am sure mean little to most people, but to you, they may mean a lot. I, myself tend to fill my poetry with small details like this, and I must say I enjoyed it here.
The flow was pretty good, although I didnt really like the use of elipses, as they seemed to break the flow at the points they were included.

Bravo

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To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important sacred or valuable...
To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility...

-Kurt Cobain [1967-1994]
:icondementeddoll:
Yeah.. I tend to use elipses too much. As I go and re-read some of my writing I see that it is a bad habit that Ive been trying to break. But every so often they pop-up again. ^_^'' But thank you for the comment. The poem might be revised later on. :heart: :hug:

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Drip...Drip...A sink full of blood...A human hanging up above....Drip...Drip...Out of sight....Always in the night....
:blackrose: :skullbones:
:iconairmega23:
:) Well, pointing out a habit is the first step to breaking it! :)
Hope you can look at my work too! :)

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To be positive at all times is to ignore all that is important sacred or valuable...
To be negative at all times is to be threatened by ridiculousness and instant discredibility...

-Kurt Cobain [1967-1994]
:iconnekura-musouka:
That's very true about love. :cries: it never lasts! Good job on the poem too.

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Useless Philosophy:

A slice of bread always manages to land peanut-butter side down. But if, by chance, you were to put the peanut-butter on both sides of the slice, it will float forever. -Tested and Proven
:icondementeddoll:
Thank you. :hug:

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Drip...Drip...A sink full of blood...A human hanging up above....Drip...Drip...Out of sight....Always in the night....
:blackrose: :skullbones:
:icon36degrees:
hey, that's cool, I recognized the title...

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So stay sweetly numb
Remain lifeless, love.
:icondementeddoll:
Yeppers. Straylight Runnnn.

--
Drip...Drip...A sink full of blood...A human hanging up above....Drip...Drip...Out of sight....Always in the night....
:blackrose: :skullbones:
:icon36degrees:
existentialism is my favourite word!

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So stay sweetly numb
Remain lifeless, love.
:icondementeddoll:
Yes. I like it too. =P

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Drip...Drip...A sink full of blood...A human hanging up above....Drip...Drip...Out of sight....Always in the night....
:blackrose: :skullbones:

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